Ummm . . . I'm not sure how I can help you fix this . . . mostly, this seem like something that would help you on a personal, emotional level (I have to do it too), but I'm not sure this is something made for others to see at a contest . . . then again, I'm sure no one but the artist would have called those random color scribbles to art--just raw emotion--but here they are in all the galleries.

As far as I'm concerned, this is to poetry as those random colors are to art, in which case the uncapitalized letters and such might be a benefit.

And try reducing the number of "it"s.