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First Kiss

September 5, 2009
By Anonymous

“Come closer” he says. I walk across the front porch moving lingeringly threw the summer night air. I stop to breathe it in. It fills me with an energy that crackles through my body jump-starting my heart. It beats loudly. I feel it in me as it throws itself against my chest. I feel its swelling pulse in my wrists and fingertips. I feel it in the bottom of my stomach.
I lean against the railing facing him but I can’t look at him.
“Closer.” His voice is deep and hoarse. I feel him scrutinizing me. He slides two fingers into a belt loop on either side of my hips and pulls me to him. I laugh and finally look up. He was smiling broadly down at me. He continues staring. Not wanting to be the first to look away but finding the tension unbearable i cannot help but to look down yet again. He unclasps a hand from behind my waist and lifts it to my face. As he did so it shook.

“I guess I’m more nervous than I thought I’d be” he says in that same low voice. He tilts my face towards his. His stare remains unbroken but the smile has vanished and a new intensity has overwhelmed his face. Then slowly, he kisses me.



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on Aug. 6 2010 at 7:00 am
DifferentTeen PLATINUM, Seaford, Delaware
32 articles 2 photos 329 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There’s no such thing as true love, just spurts of insanity—falling over and over again, thinking that won’t happen to me"

Yeah my first kiss was kind of wack, I've always wanted the slow, romantic, movie scene kind of kiss but oh well. Nice job!

on Jun. 23 2010 at 9:55 pm
CJbutterfly SILVER, Chattahoochee, Florida
7 articles 1 photo 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Never let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game\"

Aww i love it... kinda wish my first kiss was like that. that is so romantic... very good :)

on Jun. 23 2010 at 11:18 am
I.Luv.Writing BRONZE, New Haven, Connecticut
2 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
''There is always room for improvement''

You used a great amount of imagery to the point that I felt I was right there watching!Like swimchick said"I suggest you not say I so much". The last sentence could use imagery to. Again the short story was great! :)

on Jun. 23 2010 at 9:28 am
charlygee BRONZE, Orlando, Florida
3 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To Beatrice---darling, dearest, dead." -Lemony Snicket

That was adorable! Very descriptive and realistic. :)

If you have a moment, will you check out/comment on my work?


on Jun. 23 2010 at 7:01 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

That's really sweet, very welll described.  Great job.  Keep writing!

Btw, will you check out and comment on my work?


on May. 10 2010 at 10:15 pm
Alice_in_Wonderland GOLD, San Clemente, California
16 articles 0 photos 620 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;I could give up, I could stay stuck, or I could move on, So I put one foot front of the other, No no no nothing&rsquo;s gonna break my stride, &ldquo; &ndash;David Archuleta (The Other Side of Down)

aww! that's sooo cute! you should write more...

 


on May. 10 2010 at 9:23 pm
polyprincess16 SILVER, Tracy, California
7 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
No one can make you feel inferior without your consent. ~Eleanor Roosevelt

SO CUTE!!! really good imagery & description. i really loved it, but i also wish you would have continued on...keep writing!

on May. 10 2010 at 9:53 am
Anique_ThePoet GOLD, Indianapolis, Indiana
10 articles 33 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A writer should write with his eyes and painter paint with his ears.&quot; ~Gertrude Stein~

doubled over!

on Apr. 18 2010 at 11:50 pm
ShannonVictoria BRONZE, Dutch Haror, Alaska
4 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Love takes time. Don&#039;t keep asking random people to go out with you. If you wait, God will send the right person to you. But if you don&#039;t, then you may never find the one you&#039;re destend to be with.&quot; -Shannon McConnell

Good Job!!! It was so cute and...haha idk. i really liked it though. good job. :D:D:D:D

Riley141 GOLD said...
on Apr. 18 2010 at 7:02 pm
Riley141 GOLD, Yale, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; Always do right. This will gratifiy some people and astonish the rest.&quot; Mark Twain

This was awsome..good job.

 


on Mar. 27 2010 at 9:22 pm
VanillaTwilight BRONZE, DeWitt, Iowa
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ditto! encore! encore!

on Mar. 27 2010 at 7:31 pm
ShannonVictoria BRONZE, Dutch Haror, Alaska
4 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Love takes time. Don&#039;t keep asking random people to go out with you. If you wait, God will send the right person to you. But if you don&#039;t, then you may never find the one you&#039;re destend to be with.&quot; -Shannon McConnell

awww! i love it! its sooooo cute and sweet! Nice Job!

on Mar. 27 2010 at 8:17 am
hayhayrene BRONZE, Canton, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
dont fall for some one tht wont cetch you

okay this is just simply amaing

on Feb. 11 2010 at 4:43 pm
TheShadowsHaveEyes SILVER, Lansing, Michigan
9 articles 1 photo 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
How much dirt I gotta throw in the ocean to make a new island

Okay, I liked this. A lot actually, it was a very good story.

That being said I would suggest you not saying I so much, it seems to take away from the breathataking scene you're going for here.

This is an excellent shortstory anyways though,

excellent job

on Feb. 11 2010 at 3:51 pm
Lost-In-Life GOLD, Whitby, Other
11 articles 0 photos 299 comments

Favorite Quote:
It&#039;s never to late, if it weren&#039;t for the last minute many things would never get done!

You definitely have a basis for something there. The descriptions were beautiful! I'd love to see this put into a story.

on Feb. 11 2010 at 2:55 pm
ClockworkLightbulb SILVER, Nottingham, Other
8 articles 5 photos 36 comments
This is really good. short and sweet. (;

on Jan. 20 2010 at 7:08 pm
flare556 BRONZE, Fultonville, New York
2 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
I like pie!

Ditto! XDD

on Jan. 20 2010 at 2:30 pm
iloveryoualot BRONZE, Fonda, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of chocolates.~ Forest Gump

I thought that this was really good and I hope that you write more

on Dec. 29 2009 at 11:11 am
Lisette-Midnight SILVER, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Live for the moment you can&#039;t put in words.

This is wonderful!!!!

megstar96 said...
on Nov. 13 2009 at 5:25 pm
megstar96, Stickney, Illinois
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love it!!!