this was a good book review i loved it so interesting so strong it was very good. i hated this book as well

i have seen her do better. this was well done, but could be more informative. Keep up the good work. You will bea good writer someday soon.

Malina,



I don't think you are bad at writing and I think you are courageous for sharing. You've done a good job giving us lots of information about the book. Further your writing style seemed to convey the confusion you experienced while reading this book. As for thinking you are "bad at writing", I'd like you to consider changing that status to a "developing writer". Hey your only in the 8th grade. I don't expect novel quality from you until the 9th grade. Being a developing writer allows you learn from each piece you write with the consequence of getting better. Eventually we can move you to a "developed writer". The book review lacked flow, as the facts jumped around like a flea. Lack of flow makes it hard for the reader to follow what's going on. I suggest writing down all the major themes/ideas in your writing first and then organize them in a layout that flows well. Once you have a layout, you'll be amazed how some things just write themselves. From there use your layout to guide your writing and fill in with smaller bits of info related to each theme/idea.



Lastly, I'd be honored to help out with your development. So if you have a question, or need somebody to read your drafts, or a proof reader, or even help creating a layout (which really doesn't take long) I am there for you. But don't call me the night before, because I only support my own procrastination! Take care and don't forget about the things you do well already.



Ehren

This is a good response you have the sequence of events laid out nicely. Next time try having the sentences flow into one another to create a sense of fluidity with your thoughts. Keep up the great work. Tory