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Usual life

December 9, 2014
By joebro SILVER, Compton, California
joebro SILVER, Compton, California
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Favorite Quote:
Dreams are like a box of chocolates, if you hold on and think about them for to long it will all start to melt away.


anotheer person dead on my block why am i not surprised

go ahead and tell his mother so you can see the tears fall from her eyes,

you took a man's life like it was nothing

i don't know what you on but you tripping off of something,

 

to go out in the streets and kill other kill other men

i couldnt stomach the feeling i woud have barfed right then,

blocks after blocks shots after shots

seeing stains on the ground looking like blood clots

 

robbing women and children, killing a husband and his wife

this is nothing unexpected from the usual life



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Mckay ELITE said...
on Mar. 3 2015 at 9:53 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

Your diction and intense feeling is spot on. All I would say is that you space some of the lines that way it's a little more clear. But I do think you have a knack for writing about intense thing such as the ones you described in this poem.

joebro SILVER said...
on Feb. 23 2015 at 11:43 am
joebro SILVER, Compton, California
9 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dreams are like a box of chocolates, if you hold on and think about them for to long it will all start to melt away.

thank you means a lot coming from someone as great as yourself.

RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 18 2015 at 2:34 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work.&quot; -Thomas Edison

Wow, great use of language! Amzing, ya never fail to excite me Joe!