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side effects of grief

November 20, 2014
By joebro SILVER, Compton, California
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first came the tears that had me staying up all night

which turns to anger and makes me want to shout and fight

next up is the stage of denial which is disbelief

and to me this is the worst stage of the grief

now your paranoid walking around like your ok but you're really destroyed

and with all these mixed emotions got you feeling like there is some kind of void

and even though you're in the dark a ray of lioght still manages to get in

making your dark feeling become sort of dim

© Alissa F., Marblehead, MA

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RealRiter GOLD said...
on Mar. 4 2015 at 7:46 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
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Awesome... You already are an amazing writer, so with critique you'll be amazing!
RealRiter GOLD said...
on Mar. 4 2015 at 7:46 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
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Awesome... You already are an amazing writer, so with critique you'll be amazing!
joebro SILVER said...
on Mar. 4 2015 at 11:18 am
joebro SILVER, Compton, California
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thank you and don't apologize for being honest critisim only makes a person better so the more honest you are the better i'm gone become
Mckay ELITE said...
on Mar. 3 2015 at 9:50 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Overall, emotional. Edit, edit, edit (sorry for being critical.) I feel that it's a little more of an essay, so to say, than a poem. Just proof-read it and polish it. Otherwise, you convey emotion nicely.
RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 18 2015 at 2:39 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
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Nice. WOWWriting is right... :( love da creativity though!
joebro SILVER said...
on Feb. 18 2015 at 11:21 am
joebro SILVER, Compton, California
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thank you everything you just said is going to be taken into serious consideration
WOWriting SILVER said...
on Feb. 17 2015 at 1:10 pm
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Very sad topic again. I hope your life cheers up if these are a representation of them! Proof-reading could be needed for grammar and spelling occasionally, but well-written overall.