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Under the influence

May 18, 2011
By Shadow878 GOLD, Marion, Indiana
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Shadow878 GOLD, Marion, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I tell you the truth, unless you change and become like little children, you will never enter the kingdom of heaven.&quot; Matthew 18:3<br /> <br /> &quot;Do not pray for easy lives, pray to be stronger men.&quot; JFK<br /> <br /> &ldquo;Science without religion is lame, religion without science is blind.&rdquo;Albert Einstein<br /> <br /> &quot;I believe in Christianity as I believe that the sun has risen: not only because I see it, but because by it I see everything else.&quot;<br /> C. S. Lewis <br /> <br /> &quot;A young man who wishes to remain a sound atheist cannot be too careful of his reading.&quot;<br /> C. S. Lewis <br /> <br /> &quot;Anyone who doesn&rsquo;t believe in miracles is not a realist.&quot;<br /> David Ben-Gurion<br /> <br /> &quot;An eye for an eye makes the world go blind&quot; Gandi

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Most of us would never
play Russian roulette
but we'll take a drink
from someone we just met

you won't go in the army
because you might be shot
but you'll run the health risk
of smoking pot

you won't rob a bank
because your actually sane
but you'll break the law
to snort cocaine

you know murder
is a terrible sin
yet you'll kill yourself
injecting heroine

You won't sky dive
in fear of going 'plunk'
but you play the game
of driving drunk

The author's comments:
This is the frist thing i put on teen ink please give critical feedback. I want my writing to get better. Also i'm not sure of the type of poem i should have used please tell me
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This article has 11 comments.

Shadow878 GOLD said...
on Aug. 28 2011 at 6:04 pm
Shadow878 GOLD, Marion, Indiana
10 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I tell you the truth, unless you change and become like little children, you will never enter the kingdom of heaven.&quot; Matthew 18:3<br /> <br /> &quot;Do not pray for easy lives, pray to be stronger men.&quot; JFK<br /> <br /> &ldquo;Science without religion is lame, religion without science is blind.&rdquo;Albert Einstein<br /> <br /> &quot;I believe in Christianity as I believe that the sun has risen: not only because I see it, but because by it I see everything else.&quot;<br /> C. S. Lewis <br /> <br /> &quot;A young man who wishes to remain a sound atheist cannot be too careful of his reading.&quot;<br /> C. S. Lewis <br /> <br /> &quot;Anyone who doesn&rsquo;t believe in miracles is not a realist.&quot;<br /> David Ben-Gurion<br /> <br /> &quot;An eye for an eye makes the world go blind&quot; Gandi

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Thanks and thanks
Myvoice4change SILVER said...
on Aug. 28 2011 at 5:07 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
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&quot;Everything will be ok in the end. If it&#039;s not okay, it&#039;s not the end.&quot;

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I really like the style of this, and it has a nice, consistent rythm to it. And I love the point!

 

ps: I love your username too ;)

WithPenAndScript DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 6 2011 at 9:56 am
WithPenAndScript DIAMOND, Venetia, Pennsylvania
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Very true, and pretty good as well. Creative and  liek someone said above me catchy 
thetruthawaits94 SILVER said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 1:23 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Very good! How true, how true!
blitsnik SILVER said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 12:58 pm
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
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this is awesome. i wish people would read this and realize how stupid they can be sometimes. loved it though :)

 

redhairCat PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 11:39 am
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
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Yoah - very creative and catchy! I love it! Very good!!
b_gomez114 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 9:09 am
b_gomez114 BRONZE, East Haven, Connecticut
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great job, such true words

 

pill.happy.adventure PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 8:39 am
pill.happy.adventure PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
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Very creative great job
Cryswithaly(: said...
on Jun. 20 2011 at 11:44 pm
GOOD JOB!:)
HeatherBee BRONZE said...
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HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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me too- i liked the rhyming! I love the meaning here. it is perfect :) 5 stars
LoveMeIfYouDare BRONZE said...
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LoveMeIfYouDare BRONZE, Lafayette, Louisiana
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I liked how it rhymed....very true,too. Doesn't it annoy you how people can be this way?!