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February 27, 2009
By Keegan Watters SILVER, Dallas, Texas
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I sit with my feet up on the dashboard,
music bursting from the speakers in rhythmic little puffs,
windows rolled down just enough so I can dangle my left hand over the edge.

I can faintly hear the wind pecking at the cracks on the door,
sending the puddles of water on the ground into frantic ripples
and propelling crackled autumn leaves onto my car windshield.

I close my eyes and listen to the storm battering around me,
enjoying the balmy sensation of the car vents breathing hot air,
warming my skin despite the bitter cold outside.

For once I have nowhere to be, no deadlines to meet, no class to rush to,
and so I stay here just a little while longer while the world races on around me.

© Kristine M., Indianapolis, IN

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Gothgirl BRONZE said...
on Sep. 23 2010 at 9:57 am
Gothgirl BRONZE, Thomasville, North Carolina
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I really enjoyed reading this one out of all of the otheres I have read. It has great meaning to it from the way this person talks about the world racing around him as he sits still.
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on Sep. 10 2010 at 6:48 am
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This is great! 

I love the words you chose to use and the way you set up the poem :)

winy.coronadoo SILVER said...
on Aug. 19 2010 at 11:07 pm
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I love this! I can totally relate to thses feelings! Keep writing :)
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this has sooo much detail love it!!
Shminkanator5000 SILVER said...
on Aug. 19 2010 at 9:19 am
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wow you have a knack for great description! I felt like I was there! nice piece, read some of mine if you get a sec? Thanks =)
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I loved how humanly it is. The line about how you can hear the wind through the cracks of the door was spectacular
Marlyre PLATINUM said...
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what i would give for such a moment, great snapshot! read some of mine?
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that is really well written!! great job!! you really feel like you were there.
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on Jul. 28 2010 at 5:04 pm
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i loved it!
smilebright BRONZE said...
on Jul. 28 2010 at 4:40 pm
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About 27 days not that i was counting. I agree with you about this poem please post comments and rate my work
poetry_addict said...
on Jul. 28 2010 at 1:16 pm
Really good. Keep writing!
Write139 SILVER said...
on Jul. 28 2010 at 12:51 am
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This is very well developed!
Krist.M. SILVER said...
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i can see how this peice got top rank. i have a question tho, how long does it take 4 peices 2 be approved?
ViaThePurpleCrayon BRONZE said...
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Fanstastically written, abite not being my type. Great job!
writerinfinity PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 8:44 pm
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good job, detail excellent, all around good
Hippiechick10 SILVER said...
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Great work! Loved your description.

 

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on Jul. 6 2010 at 2:23 pm
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ya me 2 it wasnt my type
zobo929 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 2:22 pm
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good poem i could picture it in my mind and i can totally relate
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Wow, this is incredible. I'm speechless. Words cannot describe this beautifully written poem. I absolutely love it. Keep writing, and please check out some of my work. :)
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i've been looking for ages for someone to look to/read their writing and i havn't found anyone i particularly like, until now ! thankyou for posting all this amazing work on here i'm absolutely loving it !