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Cotton Candy MAG

October 25, 2008
By freedomfighter97 BRONZE, Lake Ann, Michigan
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puffs of sweet fiberglass
dissolve into pink crystals
on the pinnacle of my tongue.

they fall like tickled icicles
puncturing the walls
of my abdomen.

still I consume
the addicting substance,
permitting my body
to slowly commit suicide.

© Hannah B., Princeton, IL

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on Sep. 27 2012 at 10:11 am
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A reminder to Stay Strong. <3
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Its so such a simple subject yet you make look proffesional and completely awsome. I love the way you wrote this!! Read and comment on mine, please. Thanx:)
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Awesome poem and completly relatable! Would you mind commeting on my work?
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Please check out my work, im an upcoming and new writer !
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SO SIMPLE BUT AWESOME!!

 

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Wow- cotton candy seemed like such a simple thing- I love the use of larger words! Super descriptive- I love it!
JuneTaz said...
on Feb. 26 2012 at 9:56 am
I will never think of cotton candy the same way again.
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Dude I love it!! I hope you don't mind- I have a collection of my favorite poems and I'd love to add this one!! (Cited, of course :)
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Love it! Very well written! <3
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I LOVE THIS! this first words had me captivated!
lulubearlove said...
on Jan. 21 2012 at 11:59 am
I love how you picked somthing as simple as cotton candy and used such powerful words that made cotton candy seem like some type of god!
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i loved this great way to put cotton candy into use!
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agree with shmammm.!(:
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Good poem! Evokes feelings like it should.
eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 11:41 pm
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I like the twist in this poem. Although I'm wondering if it's a bit melodramatic? Anyway, great poem :)
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Great poem! I liked your use of science to explain what you said. Check out my page and comment if you like my poetry :)
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very imagery. and i love cotton candy. nice piece. please check out my piece of work and comment/rate it if you please.
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on Dec. 18 2011 at 9:59 am
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I <3 cotton candy
Fia-fia BRONZE said...
on Nov. 26 2011 at 11:18 pm
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Very good, i doubt many people look at it like that, a whole new perspective and a good one. Thank you

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Meredith15 said...
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very creative. great imagery