Loved the last few lines. Perhaps you're describing a person you met. For a free verse, poem I think it didn't quite fit. I would have reconstructed the poem in a different way and I guess this suits you and the kind of audience you might be targeting. However, this could've done well in a simple prose, I believe. Plus, a few words are too commonplace for such a description. It seems rather ordinary. One can't really understand at the end why you are writing about the person. Perhaps, as you mention he is 'beautiful', 'distinguished' and 'regrettably real'. You present evidence for these three. But only if this man had a story behind him. 'He spoke jargon or could I not catch his half broken verses? He was a hopeless poet' you bring out the hopeless poet bit after half broken verses, good synchronisation. But then you say, 'cloying temperament'. I believe it needs rhetoric to cloy, isn't it? This is being very opinionated but a suave man will never wear a shimmering green tuxedo. I mean, think about it. Do not get driven by my opinion. I am not the perfect critic. I just expressed my opinion. :)

Cool. I like the impact of the last line.