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Betrayal

May 20, 2013
By SSSplatters PLATINUM, Plainview, Minnesota
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SSSplatters PLATINUM, Plainview, Minnesota
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&quot;What does not kill you makes you stronger!&quot; or<br /> &quot;Your only limits are the ones you set on yourself&quot; Love doesn&#039;t bring happiness, happiness can just happens to be found easier where there is love-- Sam

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Betray me
Betray you
Leave me cause I not perfect,you know its true Break me down, but when your gone I'm good as new
Yet I always end up crawling back to you Singing me into false serenity like you know you do
Your voice haunts me when you say we are through We are both lost souls me and you We hurt people that is what we do
You act chivalrous... you're not, but neither am I. So, today I'm releasing a demon I've held inside. She aches and she yearns to make you pay and the good part inside me wanted to warn you it would happen today.
Let the blood spill like wasted hours. Rip apart your flesh, so your organs will be as exposed as your lies. Crack your bones so you may donate marrow to a hungry wolf. Mutilate the body like you do human hearts.
Betrayal is in the air...beware!

© Daniel N., Gibsonia, PA

The author's comments:
My old Warcraft bud Scar_Wolf and I went back and forth on this alliance and killing each other he's who I based the poem on
been so happy with one of my best friends so,
thought I needed something deep and foreboding for once for comfort, and yes it's gruesome, but so are the emotions I wrote this with and wanted to come across
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Sonza SILVER said...
on Oct. 21 2013 at 1:21 pm
Sonza SILVER, Bhubaneswar, Other
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An apple a day, if well aimed, keeps the doctor away. - P. G. Wodehouse

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nice...... though a bit dark
Zolenz DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 28 2013 at 4:58 pm
Zolenz DIAMOND, Musquodoboit Harbour, NS, Other
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The pain that have cost us, the evils which have never happened. <br /> - Thomas Jefferson

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I really like it. love the line  "mutilate the body like you do human hearts' 
Zach_M BRONZE said...
on Aug. 7 2013 at 2:35 pm
Zach_M BRONZE, Andersonville, Tennessee
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wow... autocorrect was major on his comment; sorry for the errors
Zach_M BRONZE said...
on Aug. 7 2013 at 2:27 pm
Zach_M BRONZE, Andersonville, Tennessee
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It's rather unique, but not as dark as it could have been. You have good thoughts; "Let the blood splill like wasted hours; rip apart your fless so your organs will be as exposed as your lies. Crack your bones so you may donate marrow to a hungry wolf. Mutilate the body like you do human hearts." This was the only sinister part of your poem. You're thoughts are great, but the structure of your poem could have been brought out differently, and I recoqnized some grammatical errors. I do so a lot of potential though.
SSSplatters PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 7 2013 at 11:26 am
SSSplatters PLATINUM, Plainview, Minnesota
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&quot;What does not kill you makes you stronger!&quot; or<br /> &quot;Your only limits are the ones you set on yourself&quot; Love doesn&#039;t bring happiness, happiness can just happens to be found easier where there is love-- Sam

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ty ...my english teachers think i am like the prodigy who will be famious for wrting one day...oh yeah it's awesome for a time but i turned goth after writing this stuff ...watch movies where they torture people till they die for inspiration.....its good in small incroments
Fallen_ PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 7 2013 at 11:22 am
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
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&quot; a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness&quot;

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You were right this is an evil poem you can alost feel yourself become darker after reading it, Your take on ths is elegant in a dark errie way its just great. Your going to go soo far splatter is't unfanmanoble, just don't ever stop writing becuase This, This who you are i cannot grasp fully how much an natural writer you are your gonig to go far splatter and  can't wait to read about you in the newspaper on how you are a author. Well done my friend :3