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IT'S A TRAP!

April 26, 2013
By Anonymous

My friends and I all had something in common
A few years ago
We had a place we called home
But we can’t go there anymore

It was our friend’s house
Whose father was never home
So he invited all of us over
Since him and his brother didn’t like to be alone

It’s the place we would go
To break away from reality
To experience life on another level
And lose control of our sanity

Although it smelled of cigarettes
And other illegal drugs
I miss that house
And the memories I have are not enough

This “home” was filled with suspense, Heart break,
Broken bones, blackouts, over-dialated pupils, and racing hearts
There was so much to chouse from
We didn’t know where to start

At times certain events
Made me hate this place and its people more and more
Half of the time, my mind was up in the air
While my body was still firmly planted on the floor

People said
“That place is full of lowlifes and feigns”
Part of that may be true
But really it was just a house full of kids with broken dreams


The author's comments:
This piece is very personal, and describes my life growing up as a teenager. Very good and bad memories mixed.

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PiperBloo GOLD said...
on May. 12 2013 at 7:59 pm
PiperBloo GOLD, Long Island, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;there are 2 types of writer&#039;s: one that makes you think and one that makes you wonder&quot;Brian Aldiss<br /> &quot;Some things i cannot change but til i try i&#039;ll never know&quot; Wicked the musical

i liked it. It was clear that there was a lot of emotion behind it. But the rhyming is off. Some sections have rhymes and others don't. Sorry it's a really great piece but im just helping with the writing part. If the rhyming is off it distracts the reader from the message you're trying to convey. But it is good. Keep writing!

OlveraJorge1 said...
on May. 12 2013 at 3:17 pm
I could follow but needed more descriptive flair. GO into detail about the house, GO deeper and preach about those 'lowlifes&feigns'