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The Girl in The Rain

August 12, 2012
By Justpuppy BRONZE, St Charles, Missouri
Justpuppy BRONZE, St Charles, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Lifes not measure by the number of breaths we take, but the number of moments that take our breath away.


When I first saw the Girl
She was sitting in the rain
I was in no hurry
So I stopped to ask her
Why

She said it made her happy
To feel the drops on her skin
She had burns on her legs

Wondering aloud
She asked if anyone would miss her
If she went away

The next time it rained
I walked past the Girl
I was in no hurry
So I stopped to
Talk

She said it made her happy
To have the rain wash off the blood
She had cuts on her arms

She turned to the stormy skies
She asked if anyone would miss her
If she went away

When it rained again
I went out of my way to find the Girl
She was sitting in the rain
So I stopped to
Talk

She said it made her happy
To have to water heal the hurt
She had bruises on her face

Talking to a bird near by
She asked if anyone would miss her
If she went away

When the skies next opened
I went to find the Girl
She was sitting in the rain
I held her close and we
Talked

She said it made her happy
When I came to see her
She had beautiful eyes

Staring in my eyes
She asked if I would miss her if she
Went away

It did no rain for weeks
And I went to find the Girl
By she wasn't out
So we didn't
Talk

When in stormed again
I went to find the Girl
To ask her to run away
With
Me

She was lying on the ground
the blood pooled all around
she said her dad had finally done it

She said it made her happy
To have me with her, and days it
Rained were her favorite
I held her as she died

Nobody missed her

But me


The author's comments:
I was sitting in the rain one day, and thought about a girl finding a haven from abuse on days it rained and the boy who made them shine.

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on Aug. 25 2012 at 9:15 am
Justpuppy BRONZE, St Charles, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Lifes not measure by the number of breaths we take, but the number of moments that take our breath away.

Thanks. :)

on Aug. 25 2012 at 1:20 am
Pika_Princess, Escondido, California
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This is very powerfully written! I loved the idea behind this and the meaning. Very well-written and very interesting. It was made especially stronger with your use of repitition. However, one thing did stand out to me: sometimes when you repeated a certain phrase or stanza, it would be the same every time it came  up in the poem, except once or twice there would be a small change to it. And the change really does stand out since it is so different. Once again, this was very beautifully written!