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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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OldGreg BRONZE said...
on Feb. 18 2014 at 12:43 pm
OldGreg BRONZE, Destrehan, Louisiana
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Am I allowed to be confused, because I am.

on Feb. 13 2014 at 6:42 pm
loveyoubby2018 BRONZE, Kennisaw, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
They will only care when you are gone. ~Marilyn Monroe

Wonderful poem! Just loved it!  

on Feb. 10 2014 at 6:04 pm
Ashlee_Renolds BRONZE, Linwood, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
"You Can't Get A Cup Of Tea Big Enough, Or A Book Long Enough To Suit Me.." - C.S. Lewis

Wow this is wonderful..I know u must get this a lot, but I can't help it what inspiered u to write this poem? I really luv it...R u writing any more poems?

on Feb. 9 2014 at 7:24 pm
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"Either write something worth reading or do something worth writing." -Benjamin Franklin

about a week

on Feb. 6 2014 at 4:14 pm
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That's deep. What inspired you?

on Feb. 6 2014 at 12:58 pm
EpilepticUnicorn BRONZE, Donaldson, Arkansas
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Beautiful poem. loved it

on Feb. 5 2014 at 10:52 pm
iz_teehee SILVER, Boxford, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Live in such a way that if anyone spoke badly of you, no one would believe it.

Should take a few days to a week

on Feb. 5 2014 at 11:11 am
DespondentPen SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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What a fantastic poem!  It really relays the idea of the father being too constricting.  However, I think that the rhyme is a bit forces in the two-line stanza when you mention the "birdie."  I am currently waiting to get my work approved.  Does anyone know how long this will take?

on Feb. 2 2014 at 7:44 pm
itskatomall PLATINUM, Orlando, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;How lucky I am to have something that makes saying goodbye so hard.&quot; - Winnie the Pooh

This poem is beautifully written and I loved it. I read it twice to truly understand the meaning. It sent chills down my spine. Well done! Check our some of my work! :)

on Feb. 1 2014 at 5:16 pm
Bluetooth13 SILVER, A Town In, Texas
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Really good! Would someone critique my work? I need feedback

on Jan. 30 2014 at 6:14 pm
LifeLeader PLATINUM, Roanoke, Virginia
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Wow! This poem is written beautifully!

on Jan. 24 2014 at 3:12 pm
poet_girl101 BRONZE, The Colony, Texas
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A picture is worth a thousand words but a poem is worth a million

It can have many meanings to it but in this case I think it means that though it may seem as if you will drown your dad will always have your back its deep in the meaning @Miley Cyrus

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on Jan. 14 2014 at 3:16 pm
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&quot;Don&#039;t judge a book by its cover because the words inside can be way different then the picture on the cover.&quot;<br /> &quot;Do unto others as you would have them do unto you.&quot;

This left chills down my spine, I love it!

on Jan. 10 2014 at 1:57 pm
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&quot;the biggest mistake you can make in life is to give up.&quot; - Rebekah Hanson<br /> &quot;think outside the shoe.&quot; - Jessica Cox<br /> &quot;angel wings break, so fly while you can.&quot; - Rose Smith

It's truly an amazing piece. :)

on Jan. 10 2014 at 1:56 pm
blakrose PLATINUM, Anchorage, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;the biggest mistake you can make in life is to give up.&quot; - Rebekah Hanson<br /> &quot;think outside the shoe.&quot; - Jessica Cox<br /> &quot;angel wings break, so fly while you can.&quot; - Rose Smith

Love it! It's a beautiful piece. :)

on Jan. 4 2014 at 9:03 pm
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This is an amazing poem.

on Dec. 29 2013 at 8:59 pm
author_musical PLATINUM, Torrington, Wyoming
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Sweetie, if you&#039;re going to be two faced, at least make one of them pretty. - Marilyn Monroe

This is truly amazing. I don't quite understand the title but it's really deep. Can you check out some of my work if you get the chance?

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on Dec. 28 2013 at 9:26 pm
dain01 BRONZE, Nonya, Ohio
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Love the poem but all the uncapitalized i's are making me go insane

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on Dec. 22 2013 at 9:17 pm
Joboe13 BRONZE, Plymouth, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Live as if you were to die tomorrow. Learn as if you were to live forever.<br /> -Mahatma Gandhi

This poem is amazing!!! It's really deep, and it really makes you think. You are an amazing poet, keep up the good work!