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June 12, 2011
By Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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"Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,"

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I love the way the world revolves around you, though you’re always moving.
I love it how you think you’re winning, even when you’re losing.
I love it how your smile can make even the sun brighten a bit.
I love it how you face the world, and how beautifully you see it.
I love it how even in darkness, you help me find my way.
I love it how you are a dot of color, in a sea of gray.
I love you, my sister, my only best friend; I’ll be there for you until the very end.

© Patricia G., Phoenix, AZ

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This is about my sister who has autism. I wrote a poem about her when I was really angry with her, to remind myself how much I love her.
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This article has 24 comments.

Allicat001 SILVER said...
on Jun. 18 2012 at 3:36 pm
Allicat001 SILVER, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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&quot;Love is not someone you can live with, love is someone you can&#039;t live without.&quot; <br /> <br /> &quot;Always stand up for what&#039;s right even if that means you&#039;re standing alone.&quot;

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The flow of this particular poem doesn't matter, it's the message that you get across that counts.  This poem was really sweet and reminded me of my sister, I really liked this poem:)
Tink1350 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 24 2012 at 8:25 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,&quot;

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Thanks for the comment and feedback!
beautifulspirit PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 24 2012 at 10:16 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

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Very sweet---to have a sister is one of the greatest things in the world. This poem melted my heart:)
Behind_Sapphire_Eyes said...
on Apr. 21 2012 at 9:15 pm
Despite the lack of flow and rhythmic patterns I really like your poem! Not all poems have to be rhythmical or perfectly flow-y as long as if touches the readers soul like it did for me; it is an awesome poem! Great work, Tink1350!   
Tink1350 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 12 2011 at 4:14 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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&quot;Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,&quot;

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what do you mean about the fist line? and also For all you flow-commenters, is supposed to be choppy and stuff. ive gotten alotta comments bout that.
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 12 2011 at 4:18 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

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You can look back at my last comment... I said, "Each line doesn't have to be sentences."

Lines can be long and short but about the flow, try reading real poems. Maybe then, you'll understand. :)
NinjaGirl BRONZE said...
on Jul. 11 2011 at 10:10 pm
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
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The flow could be better, and the beginings of the lines are pretty repetitive, but I like it anyway :P
Tink1350 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 11 2011 at 6:02 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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thankyou. you did help. and sorry im askin so many questions but what do u mean by  making it choppier?
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 11 2011 at 4:26 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

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Each line doesnt have to be like, sentences...

Like, in the first line,
I love the way
The world revolves around you
though you're always moving...

I mean, you can make it a little choppier... :)

-Hope I helped... :)
Tink1350 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:11 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,&quot;

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thank you.
Tink1350 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:11 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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&quot;Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,&quot;

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what do u mean by make it flow?
Tink1350 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:10 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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&quot;Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,&quot;

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thanks for reading.
Megan.J.B said...
on Jul. 9 2011 at 9:42 pm
Megan.J.B, Sault Ste Marie, Other
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Well done! I liked it alot, I agree with flow problems and rhyming patterns, but it was good none the less :)
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 9 2011 at 6:42 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

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You can still improve this poem.. like make it flow...


Anyway, I like it all the more. The descriptions... the metaphors... I just like them. You are a wonderful brother/sister... =)
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 8:48 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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this is amazing i love it my neighbor has autism five stars
Tink1350 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 6:41 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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&quot;Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,&quot;

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thankyou!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Tink1350 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 6:38 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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&quot;Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,&quot;

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Thanks Zinaidia. :)))))
Zinaidia SILVER said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 6:34 pm
Zinaidia SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
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Wow, you are very talented. I love how you contrasted a bunch of different subjects. Very well written and it has alot of emotion. Good job!
awayra BRONZE said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 9:35 am
awayra BRONZE, Bucharest, Alabama
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it reminds of rudyard kipling, yet you have your own original style and this poem's meaning is absolutely gorgeous! i suppose this is the ultimate proof of how much you love her, and what a beautiful proof is!
writer_girl15 said...
on Jul. 6 2011 at 9:06 pm
that is so sweet! <3