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Needles

September 22, 2010
By -LeftBehindBroken- GOLD, Providence, South Carolina
-LeftBehindBroken- GOLD, Providence, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Artists paint on canvas; Musicians paint on silence


Needles
No doubts cross me when I pull on my jacket
The cold air around me
Is vapor ice
And it sits on my skin.
I beg it to melt
But it wants to win against my pleads
So I trap you now
Beneath the soft cotton that covers my arms
and soon my head.
This smug little world is an illusion
Because the heat and darkness
I create.

My fingers caress
The end of my sleeve
And hit the air
that cold, wretched air that wants to kill.
But before I can hide it again
The shivers are spreading
Up my arm and along my spine
But I ignore that urge to squirm
And let it pass
Like bolts of electricity
That I subdue.
My hand is pulled back in
To my darkened haven
And I don’t ever want to let it go out there again.
Out there where
There are needles
In the air.


The author's comments:
Do you enjoy my imagery? she is out in the snow

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on Oct. 8 2010 at 3:25 pm
-LeftBehindBroken- GOLD, Providence, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Artists paint on canvas; Musicians paint on silence

in agreement ;0

Phoenixx GOLD said...
on Oct. 7 2010 at 8:05 pm
Phoenixx GOLD, Toronto, Other
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haha wicked!

Its the little things that make life big ;)


on Oct. 7 2010 at 6:38 pm
-LeftBehindBroken- GOLD, Providence, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Artists paint on canvas; Musicians paint on silence

thanks! i saw that u read a lot of my stuff. thanks so much!!!

on Oct. 7 2010 at 6:37 pm
-LeftBehindBroken- GOLD, Providence, South Carolina
16 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
Artists paint on canvas; Musicians paint on silence

thank you! i just love turning little things into images. like here, its sticking your hand into the cold and i have another about walking down a hallway!

Phoenixx GOLD said...
on Oct. 7 2010 at 3:37 pm
Phoenixx GOLD, Toronto, Other
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I like this. You used something your very good at. (Manifesting the imagry) and used it to capture what your character was thinking within a moment :)

on Oct. 4 2010 at 6:57 pm
maggiebar1 GOLD, Valparaiso, Indiana
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i liked it a lot...ur imagery is awesome!

on Oct. 4 2010 at 4:17 pm
-LeftBehindBroken- GOLD, Providence, South Carolina
16 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
Artists paint on canvas; Musicians paint on silence

thank you!!! i really got the idea for this poem from the cold weather, and also the way that im afraid to open up to people. ill read some of your stuff!

 


on Oct. 3 2010 at 2:07 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

i really like this poem! i love the way you ended it: "there are needles, in the air." so powerful. it made me want more!

check out some of my work, too if you'd like. keep writing!