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Clementine MAG

August 27, 2009
By IrisGF DIAMOND, Birmingham, Alabama
IrisGF DIAMOND, Birmingham, Alabama
55 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Clementine walks with me on Mondays
She tells me about her job and her past
She works the late shift at the waffle house
She has three brothers and a cat named Oreo
She wears her hair in braids
Tells me it used to shine like butter
Which I don't quite understand
Tells me you had to see it to know what she meant

Clementine has dark circles that shadow her eyes
She tells me it's from her late hours
She doesn't mind because she gets paid all right
She likes the smell of eggs at 2 a.m.
She doesn't get many tips but the conversation is good
Tells me about truck drivers
Who tell her about their families
Tells me about teenagers
Who might as well be veterans of a tired war

Clementine clutches the ring that hangs from her neck
She tells me its story the most
She used to wear the ring on her finger
She used to hold his hand
She used to work the day shift at the waffle house
So she could come home to him
Tells me how funerals can break your already broken spirit
And I know it still hurts her like before
Tells me how she puts flowers on his grave
And I know she hates going to that ghost town alone
So I walk with Clementine on Mondays



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so_joy SILVER said...
on Apr. 9 2013 at 7:15 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Wow. I am speechless. That was incredible. Wow.

Lizette SILVER said...
on Dec. 17 2010 at 3:22 pm
Lizette SILVER, Delphos, Ohio
5 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everyone is entitled to be stupid. But some people abuse the privlidge!

That was amazing.  I didn't really get the gist of it at the beginning, but once i read it all the way through, i understoof perfictly.  and some times, those are the best peoms.  great job!

on May. 21 2010 at 6:12 pm
Clementine SILVER, Gustavus, Alaska
5 articles 2 photos 46 comments
That was amazingly amazing. I really feel like I know Clementine. This is one of my favorite poems.

on Apr. 13 2010 at 5:30 pm
sonnysulouff BRONZE, Clarendon Hills, Illinois
4 articles 0 photos 34 comments
I absolutely love this poem! :) You are such an amazing poet! Keep it up! :) :) :)

on Feb. 12 2010 at 7:03 am
KiNABABE SILVER, Lakewood, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"WHATS MEANT T0 BE WiLL ALWAYS FiND iTS WAY"

Truely amazing

one of best poems I've ever read.

cdurk BRONZE said...
on Feb. 6 2010 at 3:36 pm
cdurk BRONZE, Fairfax Station, Virginia
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this is absolutely amazing.

you have a great talent and it's good to see that it isn't being wasted. at all.

on Feb. 3 2010 at 10:30 pm
CaptainFabulous. GOLD, Union, Missouri
11 articles 0 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
PERSONAL FAVORITE QUOTE::::

"When life hands you lemons,make BEEF STEW!"
-Andy Milanokis?(sp)

you ... have talent

did you make this up out of nowhere?!?

if so it is truly incredible

read some of my stuf??

plz...

AmnyR BRONZE said...
on Feb. 3 2010 at 9:09 pm
AmnyR BRONZE, Clifton, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 134 comments

Favorite Quote:
To the world, you may be just one person, but to one person, you may be the whole world. ~unknown

totally 5 stars, this is amazing!

on Jan. 25 2010 at 9:15 pm
the_Horsegirl SILVER, Minneapolis, Minnesota
8 articles 0 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
People need dreams, there's as much nourishment in 'em as food.
--Dorothy Gilman

If there is such a thing as truth, it is as intricate and hidden as a crown of feathers.
--Isaac Bashevis Singer

I loved this poem. If there is anything I would change, it would be to make the first paragraph sound a little less "catalog-y" I think the details about the brothers and the cat named Oreo are somewhat irrelevant and distracting.

Otherwise, really good job. Keep writing!

on Sep. 6 2009 at 5:24 pm
costarican93 GOLD, Washington, Louisiana
14 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The city looks so pretty do you want to burn it with me?"- Hollywood Undead

wow

it almost made me cry.

it was like wow.

speechless. lol

on Sep. 6 2009 at 4:50 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This piece is very creative and beautiful. I love the ending. So sweet. Great job. Five stars for you!

*meagan* said...
on Sep. 5 2009 at 1:22 pm
that is beautiful peom!!! i loved it

Deadjokr said...
on Sep. 3 2009 at 7:22 pm
Deadjokr, Childress, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never go to bed mad. Stay up and fight." Phyllis Diller

This was completely awesome! You should really keep writing!

on Sep. 3 2009 at 5:29 pm
Ms.Understood, Laramie, Wyoming
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AWWW! You're gonna make me cry. (lol) Very detailed with a lot of emotions. it made me feel for Clementine. :(

on Sep. 3 2009 at 5:19 pm
Lifesbutadream BRONZE, Hesperia, California
4 articles 2 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Change is just a new begining

This was such a beautiful poem. it told a story and it was a poem. it is unique i enjoyed every second every line spoke it's own story. wonderful. this is very beautiful.

on Sep. 3 2009 at 10:12 am
keyboard_musican SILVER, Springfield, Illinois
9 articles 0 photos 29 comments
thats was spectacular i loved it, it was so much more than a poem telling a story you could really feel the emotions

IrisGF DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 2 2009 at 9:34 pm
IrisGF DIAMOND, Birmingham, Alabama
55 articles 0 photos 5 comments
Thank you for your comment Kayla. To know that one of my pieces has afffected someone else is incredibly rewarding. Always, Iris

on Sep. 2 2009 at 8:05 pm
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
71 articles 2 photos 179 comments
THIS WAS %100 B E A U T I F U L ! ! ! this is amazing sad and a wonderful story in a perfect poem! <3ed it

<3,

Kayla