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A Message from the heart

April 2, 2015
By WordReveler BRONZE, N/A, Washington
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The sky darkens in
its hazy way,
my gloomy heart
just meets the pace;
the rain plummets
to the yielding earth,
full of corruption,
and it just gets worse;
I cannot stand,
I'll fall down,
past bare cement,
below the ground;
sadness is filler,
in the crevasse of the heart,
but it does not fix,
just tears apart.
I don't know how
I can heal this gap,
every new road
is just a trap;
the inconsistency
of mind and heart
has overwhelmed,
from the start;
but there's a way
around this mess,
yet it won't just happen,
it starts with us.

© April P., Newark, DE

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LeisurelySketches GOLD said...
on Jan. 18 2017 at 7:35 am
LeisurelySketches GOLD, Tricity, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Your life has a limit but knowledge has none. (Zhuangzi)

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Great rhyme scheme and flow, it's wonderful how many images your poem conjures up. All the lines fit so harmoniously into one another, and have an original feel.
BabySnickers15 SILVER said...
on Nov. 25 2015 at 3:36 pm
BabySnickers15 SILVER, Columbus, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I can accept failure, but I can&#039;t accept not trying&quot; ~Michael Jordan~<br /> &quot;The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams&quot; ~Franklin Delano Roosevelt~

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LOVES IT TIMES 1MILLION!!!!
CNBono17 SILVER said...
on Nov. 25 2015 at 3:11 pm
CNBono17 SILVER, Rural, South Carolina
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Lego ergo sum (Latin&mdash;I read, therefore, I am)<br /> The pen is mightier than the sword&mdash;unknown<br /> Don&#039;t let anyone look down on you because you are young, but set an example for believers in speech, in conduct, in love, in faith, and in purity&mdash;1 Timothy 4:12

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The last line gets you. Nice job!
WordAddict GOLD said...
on Jun. 1 2015 at 8:19 pm
WordAddict GOLD, Montclair, New Jersey
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&quot;Timshel!&quot;

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That was a beautiful poem! I agree the last line was so nice, and it wrapped up the poem with a hopeful way. yay
WordReveler BRONZE said...
on Apr. 29 2015 at 10:38 am
WordReveler BRONZE, N/A, Washington
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Thanks! :)
WordReveler BRONZE said...
on Apr. 29 2015 at 10:37 am
WordReveler BRONZE, N/A, Washington
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@ Thanks for the feedback, I'll do that. :)
The_DoctorDonna PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 28 2015 at 2:49 pm
The_DoctorDonna PLATINUM, Anytown, Iowa
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&quot;Nothing is impossible. The word itself says &#039;I&#039;m Possible&#039;&quot;

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This is a beautiful poem. You are really talented. Great job :)
AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD said...
on Apr. 28 2015 at 10:28 am
AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD, WHOOP, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;It takes more strength to cry at mid-defeat.&quot;<br /> -Susan Boyle<br /> &quot;The closer you get to the light, the bigger your shadow becomes.&quot;<br /> -Kingdom Hearts

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Great last line, you're on a good start! Check your rhythm and stresses in a few lines, but other than that it was good.:P