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Home Sweet Home

December 11, 2008
By Kiana Baker GOLD, Alto, Texas
Kiana Baker GOLD, Alto, Texas
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This was never what we planned...

To be lost in a sea of dancing emotions,
unable to catch our breath.
Losing me, losing you, and all that we have left.
If fairytales were real, you said, perhaps we'd make our own.
Into your deep brown eyes, I fell, to find my home, sweet home.
But is this love, genuine love or lust that grows each day?
For now, we'll hold each other close until we find our way,
If fairytales are real, you say, perhaps we'll make our own.
Into your deep brown eyes, I fall, and there...
my home, sweet home.


The author's comments:
This poem is about being in love.
The overwhelming sense of comfort you have when you're with that person is truly indescribable. However, I attempted to do just that in this poem. Kiana

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on Nov. 27 2011 at 12:28 am
tweetiebruce PLATINUM, Sydney, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Life is like music - You can make mistakes so you try again. But when the piece can't be helped you try again another time.

beautifully done, i am a big fan of yours. I especially love the 'To be lost in a sea of dancing emotions unable to catch our breath'. that was done really beautifully :)

Savanne BRONZE said...
on Apr. 22 2011 at 8:16 am
Savanne BRONZE, Colfax, California
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Favorite Quote:
"I was never going to amount to much anyway, but now, statistically speaking, there's a better chance that some part of me will go on to greatness somewhere in the world. I'd rather be partly great than entirely useless." ♥ -Unwind

I love this poem and all of your other poems as well. You are an AMAZING writer!

Sapphire said...
on Sep. 13 2010 at 9:40 pm
Sapphire, Holland, Michigan
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This poem captures the need to discover true love that lies  deep in every young person's heart. It is touching.

However, I would reconsider the phrase 'home sweet home'. It is over used and cheapens your lovely poem!

Great job :)


nutmeg212 GOLD said...
on Mar. 21 2010 at 10:45 am
nutmeg212 GOLD, Coventry, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't worry about it." -V.Z.

wow... no other word other than wow...

on Feb. 27 2010 at 5:16 am
paranomial PLATINUM, Hyderabad, Other
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amazing...simply amazing! :)

on Aug. 8 2009 at 1:30 am
ElizabethW. DIAMOND, Oconto, Wisconsin
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I love it, but I think one of the things that sets it apart from the stereotype of love poems is the passing thought that it might just be lust. You don't portray love as this perfect, ooey-gooey feeling with an always happy ending, but rather just describe the sometimes and sometimes not so temporary comfort.