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Here...On Earth

February 1, 2011
By Anna-Akua SILVER, Taunton, Massachusetts
Anna-Akua SILVER, Taunton, Massachusetts
9 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
But the funny thing about it is I ain&#039;t even start yet<br /> I&#039;m only using my mind I ain&#039;t even use my heart yet<br /> I just evolved I ain&#039;t speaking theoretically <br /> -Keys &quot;Dear Dummy&quot;


When the Earth was created were you made?
Did you harvest all the land’s fruits?
And tame all the wild brutes?
Did He up above reward you with peace?
Made sure all the creatures bowed at your feet?

Did He lay flowers on your eyes,
And made sure you were drifting high?
Did He whisper in your ear,
What all men wish to hear?
Or did he rip you from peace,
Take away a piece?

Then at night you woke.
You gasped and clung to your side.
You found something missing.
Some part of you that you had never seen gone.
Your bone was ripped from your body.
Your eyes fluttered and you looked up at the light.
Before you was a creature of curve and shape.
“A woman” your mind whispered.

Her hair long, shoulders strong,
She shook you like the sky’s rivaling song.
You looked in shock, such perfection in body.
Such sweetness in eyes, you were swept up in melancholy.
You gaped at her with your mouth hanging wide,
Then she took you in her arms and you both cried.
You were no longer missing, because there before you was a creature.
A creature that hadn’t bowed to your feet.
But a kind spirit that made your heart leap.

Then He walked and you both took your place.
She stepped back timid, afraid of the unknown.
You stepped up, held her and proclaimed her as your own.


The author's comments:
There is some shadow of mystery clouding the romance between Adam and Eve.
This is how I approached it, what do you think?

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on Aug. 25 2011 at 8:53 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 248 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister<br /> it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp<br /> <br /> ohana means family no one gets left behind

its fine dont worry and your very very welcome

on Aug. 25 2011 at 5:47 pm
Anna-Akua SILVER, Taunton, Massachusetts
9 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
But the funny thing about it is I ain&#039;t even start yet<br /> I&#039;m only using my mind I ain&#039;t even use my heart yet<br /> I just evolved I ain&#039;t speaking theoretically <br /> -Keys &quot;Dear Dummy&quot;

sorry for such a late response. THANK YOU so much, i really try to put my all in each poem i write

on Jul. 29 2011 at 7:41 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 248 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister<br /> it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp<br /> <br /> ohana means family no one gets left behind

that is really amazing :)

on Jun. 29 2011 at 10:21 pm
Anna-Akua SILVER, Taunton, Massachusetts
9 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
But the funny thing about it is I ain&#039;t even start yet<br /> I&#039;m only using my mind I ain&#039;t even use my heart yet<br /> I just evolved I ain&#039;t speaking theoretically <br /> -Keys &quot;Dear Dummy&quot;

i agree :)

on Jun. 21 2011 at 9:14 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

I think thats exactly the writer's job, it's all about description and imagery.

on Jun. 21 2011 at 5:09 pm
Anna-Akua SILVER, Taunton, Massachusetts
9 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
But the funny thing about it is I ain&#039;t even start yet<br /> I&#039;m only using my mind I ain&#039;t even use my heart yet<br /> I just evolved I ain&#039;t speaking theoretically <br /> -Keys &quot;Dear Dummy&quot;

lol... thank you! everyone thinks its too private and personal:? but as writers isnt our job to describe the intimate and personal the way we see it?

on Jun. 14 2011 at 12:38 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

Aaaaawww, this is so, cute :) It's very cute, very sentimental, I like that.

on Apr. 17 2011 at 3:46 pm
Anna-Akua SILVER, Taunton, Massachusetts
9 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
But the funny thing about it is I ain&#039;t even start yet<br /> I&#039;m only using my mind I ain&#039;t even use my heart yet<br /> I just evolved I ain&#039;t speaking theoretically <br /> -Keys &quot;Dear Dummy&quot;

aww! THANK YOU! and i agree, there is something about Adam and Eve that just grips my attention

on Apr. 2 2011 at 9:23 pm
RedheadAtHeart ELITE, Mountain Home, Idaho
109 articles 0 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love with open hands. - Madeleine L&#039;Engle

Oh, I love it! That's kind of a lost moment in history, and you made a beautiful image out of the little we know. Five stars. :)